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| align=left style="background:#EBF5FB; |<nowiki>“</nowiki>Take us to warp,<nowiki>“</nowiki> said the commanding officer as he sat down.'' | | align=left style="background:#EBF5FB; |<nowiki>“</nowiki>Take us to warp,<nowiki>“</nowiki> said the commanding officer as he sat down.'' | ||
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''<nowiki>“</nowiki>All stop! Arm weapons!<nowiki>“</nowiki> yelled the Captain. | ''<nowiki>“</nowiki>All stop! Arm weapons!<nowiki>“</nowiki> yelled the Captain. | ||
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Now, we get quite a bit from this scene, but not near as much as we could if a bit of magic were sprinkled in. Certainly, all the dialogue gets quickly to the point and the action of what’s going on, but do any of the characters seem realistic and alive to you? Indeed, in this case, they seem very much like two-dimensional cardboard cutouts. Let’s look at the same scene now, with a bit of magic thrown in. | Now, we get quite a bit from this scene, but not near as much as we could if a bit of magic were sprinkled in. Certainly, all the dialogue gets quickly to the point and the action of what’s going on, but do any of the characters seem realistic and alive to you? Indeed, in this case, they seem very much like two-dimensional cardboard cutouts. Let’s look at the same scene now, with a bit of magic thrown in. | ||